Enter the Moon (A Warriors of Luna Novel) by Jennifer Fisch-Ferguson
2 out of 5 Stars
*I was provided a copy of Enter the Moon by the author in exchange for an honest review. I am not compensated for my honest opinion.*
Kama DeKosse has great plans for her life. She’s been training to be an opera singer since the age of seven. While on vacation and shopping for performance gowns, Kama meets Jack Twist and everything in her life gets thrown into a tailspin. Neither Kama nor Jack can deny their attraction to the other, but the obstacles they have to overcome may be too great. Their age difference is a major hurdle, yet it’s not the biggest thing standing in their way.
When Kama finds out her life is not at all what she thought it was, and neither is her boyfriend Jack, she’ll have to take some pretty big leaps of faith in order to survive. Her career in the world of opera hangs in the balance, and a new family of sorts is waiting for her on the other side.
Enter the Moon is a paranormal romance and urban fantasy novel that includes a romance with an age difference and werewolf shifters. The story is told in third person point of view by both main characters, even though it is mostly focused on Kama’s story.
Having both main characters be shifters along with their age difference was an interesting spin on the paranormal aspect of the story. The setting was also good, moving from LA to NYC and then focusing on Central Park. I also enjoyed the way the author used Jack’s “inner wolf” in a way that kept you guessing before you knew the truth. But in my opinion, the execution of what could have been a great plot was lacking.
At several points in the story, important events appeared to be thrown in with no transition. Each of these events felt misplaced, shocking in an unintended way. The entire story also seemed fragmented into different sections. It started with a large focus on Kama and Jack’s developing relationship and Kama acting very mature. When the story moved to NYC, Kama practically turned into a different character with more immature actions. We were also introduced to another character, who later disappeared from the story. The final section was the only one containing werewolves, which wasn’t really enough time to delve into the entire situation. Jack and Kama’s relationship was mostly an afterthought once we reached this point. I wanted to see more focus on the two of them together, or Jack explaining to Kama some of the things he mentioned in narration. Almost in passing, he mentioned Kama being his mate and that he couldn’t date her, but those issues were never really explored.
One big issue for me was the amount of internal dialogue from both characters. I understood this was partly done to show the split between the human and wolf personalities, but it pulled me out of the story because of the frequent shift between third person (narration) and first person (inner dialogue). At times there was almost as much inner dialogue as there was narration, and it didn’t add anything to the story, only told us what we already knew. The inner dialogue also contributed to an overall feel of “telling” instead of “showing,” though arguably this issue wasn’t limited to the inner dialogue. Telling the reader Kama and Jack made small talk over dinner didn’t help me get invested in the relationship.
Probably the most prominent issue for me was the editing—missing words, words out of order, commas in the wrong place, incorrect and missing punctuation, misuse and overuse of semicolons, sentences mashed together or ending abruptly. Dialogue (internal and actual) lacked contractions, making it feel stiff and formal. Internal dialogue was a mix of being in italics or single quotation marks, sometimes both and sometimes neither.
As much as I wanted to like this book, I had a difficult time becoming invested in it and sticking with it. This book just wasn’t for me.